Good morning Qq
Dog!
What're you making?
Where's mine?
Carly?
Carly?!
Can you help me for a second?
Can you get me down the sugar?
Poor mama
Ok, thank you
Carly?
Carly?!
What do you want for dinner?
You sure?
Okay
I'm gonna miss you so much next year
Nice end punctuation it makes your paper have more contrast. Who is qp? the poem was a little confusing to me but good. I like your emphasis. Great work! :)
ReplyDeleteI love the repetition. I think there should be more of a twist at the end but it was still great. I think there could be some better word choices to create better imagery but it's still really good.
ReplyDeleteThe poem was a little confusing. Who was the person talking too? I have seen you write some of the most amazing pieces. Should write a little bit more. It's still a great piece.
ReplyDeleteI personally love this poem, its about her mom and if you knew her then this would make a ton of sense. i like the words you decided to go with, out of all the words lisa says in a minute. great job.
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